Touchstone2.2Sample.pdf

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Logan Stevens

English Composition II

December 12, 2019

Annotated Bibliography

Brown, M., & Funk, C. (2008). Food security under climate change. Science, 319

(5863), 580-581. doi: 10.1126/science.1154102

The authors claim that developing regions of the globe are likely to face serious food

insecurity as climate change affects crops. These regions are particularly

endangered because they are distinctly vulnerable to the demands of Western

markets (the desire for mono-cropping corn, for example, in order to feed cattle) and

lacking in the kinds of agricultural technology that help farmers cope with

environmental effects on crops. Brown and Funk claim that investing in local food

economies—including sustainability, agricultural technologies, and emergency

plans—will help these areas of the globe acquire enough food in the face of climate

change. change. This source will be useful to my paper as it provides a big picture

example of the related effects of factory farming and the coming dangers of climate

change that push us to change our eating and food production habits, so I can use this to

discuss both my argument and the counter-arguments.

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(Peer-Reviewed Article)

Cook, C. (2004). Diet for a dead planet: How the food industry is killing us. New

York, NY: New Press.

Cook argues that our current food system is destroying us in several ways. For

example, we have pesticides and antibiotics that are used in industrial agriculture,

as well the significant ecological damage of industrial food production, the stripped

nutrients that we now find in our food, and the social justice issues of farm worker

and immigrant labor. This book will be useful to the conclusion of my essay when I

encourage readers to take action beyond just purchasing choices.

(Book)

Davis, C., & Lin, B.H. (2005). Factors affecting U.S. beef consumption. Retrieved from

https://www.ers.usda.gov/publications/pub-details/?pubid=37389.

This government website provides information on beef consumption in the United

States. It breaks down beef consumption by geography (highest in the Midwest and

lowest in the Northeast), by percentage eaten by rural or urban consumers, and by

race and ethnicity. This information establishes context for the topic and will be useful

in the introductory paragraphs of my essay to inform readers of the popularity of

eating beef in America.

(Credible Website)

Lappe, A. (2010). Diet for a hot planet: The climate crisis at the end of your fork. New York,

NY: Bloomsbury.

In this book, Lappe describes the effect of industrial food production on global climate

change. She traces food from planting and animal husbandry to harvest and production,

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ultimately arguing that we need to take a more local and sustainable approach to food

production. This book will be very useful to my essay because of the focus on climate

change and the discussion of animal production in particular. These ideas will support the

part of my thesis that focuses on consuming beef that is locally sourced.

(Book)

Palmer, B. (2010). Pass on grass: Is grass-fed beef better for the environment? Slate.

Retrieved from

http://www.slate.com/articles/health_and_science/the_green_lantern/2010/12/pass_

on_grass.htm

Palmer compares the environmental impact of both grain-fed, factory-farmed beef

and grass-fed, free-range beef. Some controversial evidence exists that grain-fed

beef might be better in some ways; however, the expenses of grain, issues of

monocropping corn and soy, and excess manure suggest that grass-fed is

environmentally better. Palmer also emphasizes that however the cow is raised,

“eating beef will never be the greenest thing you do in a day” (para. 2). This source

will be useful to my essay because it tends to favor grass-fed beef while highlighting

the negative environmental impacts of all beef, which will help me evaluate the

environmental consequences of eating beef and discuss alternative actions.

(Magazine)

Pollan, M. (2002). An animal’s place. The New York Times. Retrieved from

http://www.nytimes.com/2002/11/10/magazine/an-animal-s-place.html

Pollan, a well-respected food journalist and activist, engages with the ethical

arguments of vegetarianism, admitting that animals feel pain and fear, and that they

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deserve to be treated humanely. He extends this discussion to the ethical conflicts

surrounding factory farming and the negative treatment of animals. Pollan

ultimately rejects vegetarianism and calls, instead, for an early version of

“locavorism,” sourcing one’s food from environmentally responsible and humane

producers who are also geographically close. This article will be useful to my essay

because Pollan’s perspective is foundational to my argument that it matters how

our food is produced and that when it comes to beef, specifically, we should aim for

the most sustainable methods if we’re going to eat it at all.

(Newspaper)

Ruechel, J. (2006). Grass-fed cattle: How to produce and market natural beef. North

Adams, MA. Storey Publishing.

This book is a guide for raising grass-fed cattle. It is useful for describing the health

benefits of grass-fed beef in particular, as well as the more positive environmental

impacts as compared to grain-fed, factory-farmed beef. This source will be useful

to my essay because it provides factual data and statistics that will support my

argument that grass-fed beef is better both for consumers and the environment.

(Book)

Sager, G. (2008). Where’s your beef from?: Grass-fed beef: Is it green, humane and

healthful? Retrieved from: http://www.life.ca/naturallife/0812/grassfed_

beef_green_humane_healthful.html This article compares the differences between grass-fed and grain-fed beef. It

highlights the health benefits of grass-fed over grain-fed, discusses that grass-fed

does not equal organic, and describes the negative global impact of grass-fed

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beef—particularly that raised outside the US. This source will be useful to my

argument since it presents a wealth of data and discusses the complexity of the

topic. I will also be able to use this source to present the opposing viewpoints to

my argument.

(Credible Website)

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Reflection Questions:

1. Accurately recording bibliographic information is essential and saves you time, as you can transfer this information to the References page of your drafted essay. Each source entry should include a brief summary of the source as well as 3-4 sentences describing how you intend to use that source to build or support your argument. Discuss how your annotated bibliography meets these criteria. (2-3 sentences)

My annotated bibliography meets all of these requirements because I have summarized the source and explained how I am going to use it within my Argumentative essay. I think this is an important step before drafting the essay, because I’m finding I take less time gathering information since I’m explaining the validity and usefulness of each source.

2. Which strategies were most helpful for you when searching for credible sources? (2-3

sentences)

I found it extremely helpful to look at, not only when the source was published, but whether or not the information was going to help support my claim or not. On top of that, cross-checking the information to make sure it is valid. This helped me find sources that I could utilize fully, instead of pulling one detail from each.

3. What difficulties did you face while searching for credible sources? How did you

overcome these difficulties? (2-3 sentences) I was able to find a lot of sources that could only provide a small piece of support toward my claim. It was a bit more difficult to find sources in which I could use more than one point. I tried to make sure that I was searching for a clear and consistent group of sources to ensure I didn’t need more than the few sources I found.

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Annotated Bibliography Rubric and Feedback

Rubric Category

Feedback Score (acceptable, needs improvement etc.)

Annotated Bibliography

You have exceeded the required number of sources. You summarize them very clearly, and you provide information about how you plan to use them to support your thesis statement.

18/20

Quality of Sources

All sources appear to be credible and relevant to your topic. You’ve formatted this effectively as well.

13/15

Style Your word choices are consistently effective. You

do a good job of avoiding redundancy and imprecise language.

5/5

Conventions You adhere well to all of the APA formatting

requirements and your use of English conventions is consistent throughout the touchstone. Well done.

5/5

Reflection You answer all of the questions thoroughly,

providing insights, observations, and examples in your responses. You consistently exceed the length guidelines for your responses.

5/5

Overall Score and Feedback: 46/50