Following the prompt: please revise my essay FOLLOWING THe corrections of my professor, to ensur I follow the prompt and the criteria!! First, I will provide the professors corrections on my essay, then the prompt:
CORRECTIONS TO FOLLOW: Please review the MLA formatting lecture as your essay title should not be in quotes or in bold. Your introduction is very interesting, however intros for this essay should include the relevant texts and authors, which you have not presented in your intro. Additionally you don’t really have a clear and concise thesis statement that is presenting a definition of both terms and the importance of distinguishing between the two. You address this throughout your intro, but it is not done in a distinguishable thesis. Your first topic sentence is a very interesting argument but it is not one that addresses the present prompt of defining pleasure and happiness. Please be sure to review the function and format of body paragraphs with me and or our embedded tutor. As a stated in the prompt, you should not be discussing how a person pursues and or achieves happiness or pleasure in this essay. Reading through this essay, you are very obviously a good writer, however you have not completed the assignment at hand. Please be sure to read The Prompt carefully and closely. Grade: 67 percent (I know thats insane..)
Essay on the prompt of: What are the characteristics of happiness, and how do they differ from the characteristics of pleasure? Why is this distinction important in modern day America? Essay 1- Happiness V Pleasure
Using Ricard, Mcmahon, Kid Cudi plus at least one additional source of your choice, please answer the following prompt:
Prompt- What are the characteristics of happiness, and how do they differ from the characteristics of pleasure? Why is this distinction important in modern day America?
The final question of the prompt, Why is this distinction important in modern day America? should be the place where you process what we are learning in this class to todays reality. Please feel free to connect current events and the state of affairs to the question of happiness v. pleasure as you see fit, but please keep the prompt question in mind- remember, the point of the essay is to answer the prompt.
When we define, we are answering the question, what is it? To review details on how to make argumentative definitions, review the Definition section of Chapter 3 (pg 84).
When we say something is valid, we are saying that the conclusion of the argument has been established. To review details on validity, please see the Sound Arguments section of Chapter 3 (pg 92).
When we are analyzing a visual text, we are looking at the field of semiotics, meaning we are looking at implications and symbols. To review details on analyzing a visual text, please refer to the Seeing Versus Looking section of Chapter 4 (pg 143).
This essay is essentially asking you to define happiness and pleasure based on the McMahon, Kid Cudi, Ricard and additional texts. From these pieces, find what the authors are claiming. Are these claims valid? As in, when Kid Cudi shows himself at a party, drinking, and being surrounded by beautiful people, he is implying that this equates happiness; however, has this been established as true?
Just to clarify, the prompt of this essay asks “what differentiates happiness and pleasure.” It isnt asking what your definition of happiness is. It isnt asking what your judgment of these terms is. It isnt asking what a person needs to get or obtain happiness. It is asking what IS happiness, what IS pleasure, and how are they different.
Possible questions for you to consider:
Is happiness a feeling?
Is happiness a state of mind?
Does it vary from person to person?
How long does happiness last? How long does pleasure last?
Is happiness more meaningful than pleasure? If so why?
Possible Essay Structure
Introduction (1 paragraph)
Be sure to mention the concept of happiness. Be sure to introduce all of the texts that will be discussed in the essay- include titles, authors, and brief summaries/descriptions. Be sure that your thesis is at the end of your introduction and is a clear and direct response to the prompt.
Body paragraphs (1-2 paragraphs)
Provide a characteristic of or definition for the concept of happiness, explain what it means, and evaluate if the claims the authors are making are valid. Be sure to provide quotes to support your topic sentence, and be sure to analyze the quotes.
Example topic sentence: Happiness is synonymous with heavenly felicity, and good feeling.
Body paragraphs (1-2 paragraphs)
Provide a characteristic of or definition for the concept of pleasure, explain what it means, and evaluate if the claims the authors are making are valid. Be sure to provide quotes to support your topic sentence, and be sure to analyze the quotes.
Example topic sentence: Pleasure is synonymous with momentary bursts of good feeling that ultimately lead to dissatisfaction.
Body Paragraph (2-3 paragraphs)
Discuss the various differences between happiness and pleasure. Be sure to provide quotes to support your topic sentence, and be sure to analyze the quotes.
Example topic sentence: While both pleasure and happiness relate to feelings, pleasure is limited to temporary experiences while happiness is a state of mind.
Body Paragraphs (1-2)
Discuss why differentiating between the two concepts is important in modern day America. Be sure to provide quotes to support your topic sentence, and be sure to analyze the quotes.
The distinction between happiness and pleasure is important as it provides a value system for modern day living.
Conclusion (1 paragraph)
Restate the major claims of the essay. Explain why what has been discussed is important.
This essay is to be 3-4 pages (not including your works cited page)
It needs to adhere to MLA structure for document, lay out, and citation
This essay needs to be submitted via Canvas to be eligible for a grade.
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